Feedback and Changes Needed

I received some feedback from a Media studies graduate, who watched my short film and highlighted the key areas where I needed to change or tweak.

This is the list.

0:25- Title music needs cropping (currently 4 secs)

0:31- Text positioning (maybe colour? )

1:10- End Hip Hop Music

1:16- Trim 'Next'

1:37- Add more ellipsis- no fade

1:38- Scratch noise ( separate black page)

1:58- Cut ' They don't listen'

2:08- Adjust cue of music to second headphone

2:23- Adjust music level to low and extend till fade out

2:25- Extend 'wake up music loop'

2:47- Trim just before button press.)

2:47- Adjust music to button press.)

3:22- Lower music as he leaves room

3:32- Trim TV Dubstep announcement (take out)

3:39- See above adjust length of reaction shot( increase song volume)

3:59- Trim shop entrance and then jump cut

4:18- Cut shop leave scene

4:22- Establishing shot adjust image edit to song drop

4:50- Trim look up to straight to the point, octopus and above

5:06- Edit sound to fade in

5:23- Repeat the head spin sequence

5:36- Take out Wobble 

5:45- Mashup- the end - quick cuts/ Chaos!

5:51- Trim last headphone shot

5:55- 'NOO' blackout end the music and add weird sound

5:56 Louden the Gasp

END- Expand title length